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Tick, tock, tick, tock

Watch your body, limply rock

Drip, drop, drip, drop

Smell your body, slowly rot

Tip, toe, tip, toe

One step over, the edge you go

Breathe, slow, Breathe, slow

This is your last breath you know

Twiddle, Dee, twiddle, dumb

Feel your body, going numb

Rap tap Tum, rap tap Tum

Your heart it beets, like a drum

Think, fast, think, fast

Insanity, has your heart, in grasp

Black, out, black, out

It's over now, without a doubt
i wrote this with the friday the 13th tune in my head and the begining of the poem in my unfinesed poems hope u like
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TactlessPenguin Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I really like it, it has a cool form. It doesn't seem unfinished to me. :)
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candygirl101010 Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
im glad it seems tied together then
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writerELEASE Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2013  Student Writer
Chilling Braaaaains...  I like it! 
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candygirl101010 Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oh thank u <3
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writerELEASE Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2013  Student Writer
That's alright!
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HexPhotography Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2013  Professional Photographer
would you be interested in getting this published in Freque Magazine? We recently started accepting literature work and this is really great! Perfect for our dark issue out in Oct. All the info is on the fb pg www.facebook.com/frequemagazine or you can email:
info@frequemag.com if you are interested :)
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candygirl101010 Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
that would interest me greatly actully!!! omg im sooo happy u like it!!!
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AlexTheRotten Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
And so...
You pretty much kick my ass in poetry lmao!
That pretty damn good dude!! :D
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candygirl101010 Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
omg thanks im sooooooo happy u like it :tighthug:
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AlexTheRotten Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem dude!!! :D

Too Much Hugging
 
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candygirl101010 Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
dude i love you! where r u from? u look like ur from my school
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AlexTheRotten Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
oh I love you too! :D lol
I'm from Texas lol
where are you from?? hmmm? :3
I probably am not from your school for I have graduated. 
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candygirl101010 Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
im from canada 2 far away *sigh*
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AlexTheRotten Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
O: I see
Yeah you are far away lol... 
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candygirl101010 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
yah shocker eh?
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GekkeWekke Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013
Damn girl, some good poem again that you left here for us!
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candygirl101010 Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
haha why thank you <3 there alittle slower cmming because my inspirations dieing
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the-alpha1 Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oh...my....
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candygirl101010 Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
haha thanks ik ude b lost 4 words
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the-alpha1 Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
heh yeah, keep writing my pretty. ;)
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candygirl101010 Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
haha i shall
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sumersela Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Insanity's Grasp? ^^ 

i find it spooky :D reminds me a bit of the Joker :D

good job
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GekkeWekke Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013
Haha :p
Maybe that's why I immediatley liked it :p
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sumersela Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
kent ge da lieke vn freddy krueger? "1,2 he's coming for you, 3,4 better lock our door"

da kunde perfect me dees doen :D

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candygirl101010 Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
asp thats perfect y didnt i c it b4!?
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sumersela Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Blood Tears Aproves
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candygirl101010 Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
YAY
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sumersela Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
it's good :D
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candygirl101010 Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
yay im glad u think so
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